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Could You use a Friend?

03 Jun

can u use a friend

 

 

By: Tony L. Jefferson, Jr.

 

 

Can I be that shoulder to lean on, when time drags you down?

Or the lender of an ear when the world doesn’t hear your plea

Could you use a friend?

A friend like me

Will you succumb to the pressures of life?

Or live it full of agonizing strife

Could you use a friend?

A friend like me

Are you tired of searching for a good man?

Only to find that you overlooked a plenty

Could you use a friend?

A friend like me

Are u struggling to find that one good lady?

Only to find you had her all along

Could you use a friend?

A friend like me

The purest light shines from within an unconfined heart

Confined hearts are nothing but lies about the love they truly feel

Could you use a friend?

A friend like me

At times I slip and make a mistake

But I am honest and my intent is never to hurt

Could you use a friend?

A friend like me

A stranger cries on the outside looking in

So let him inside to experience the love shared between all

Could you use a friend?

A friend like me

 

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4 responses to “Could You use a Friend?

  1. joy

    June 4, 2009 at 7:43 pm

    I am going to have to look all through your stuff again to re-read. I can definitely use a friend.
    How are you now?
    Joy

     
  2. Gina

    June 5, 2009 at 12:12 am

    I love that poem – and the photo is just adorable! Thank you!

     
  3. Terri Bebla

    June 5, 2009 at 8:02 pm

    Once again, very nice work.
    I look forward to reading more.

    Everyone can use a good friend!

     
  4. Jim Spaulding

    June 6, 2009 at 9:42 pm

    Nice one T,
    I’m not sure how I feel about the refrain: I think it may take away from the piece by breaking it up a bit too much, but I respect the concept. Perhaps, if you want to keep the repeated refrain, you could add paragraph breaks before and after each refrain to improve the flow of the piece. Personally I found them a bit distracting from an otherwise great poem. Other than that minor gripe, a great piece! It seems like you are really finding your voice here. Congratulations.

     

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